I really like the intro you have. The hook line was good. Def gonna get a good mark on it. :)
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I like your intro Erin!
Your intoro is really strong, you wove everything together well :)
you have a great intro :P
Thanks everybody!
This looks really good so far. I am concerned about the pronoun in the last sentence: "They touch on cultural contact..." Is the pronoun "they" referring to the writers of Avatar, or the "concepts that were introduced years ago"?
Thanks for pointing that out! I will fix that for sure. I meant to be referring to the movie Avatar.
its not 100% but its getting there
Great Intro!
I really like the intro you have. The hook line was good. Def gonna get a good mark on it. :)
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DeleteI like your intro Erin!
ReplyDeleteYour intoro is really strong, you wove everything together well :)
ReplyDeleteyou have a great intro :P
ReplyDeleteThanks everybody!
ReplyDeleteThis looks really good so far. I am concerned about the pronoun in the last sentence: "They touch on cultural contact..." Is the pronoun "they" referring to the writers of Avatar, or the "concepts that were introduced years ago"?
ReplyDeleteThanks for pointing that out! I will fix that for sure. I meant to be referring to the movie Avatar.
Deleteits not 100% but its getting there
ReplyDeleteGreat Intro!
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